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EXPLANATION OF TITLE: some of the lines or phrases in this are lines/phrases I've wanted to say to people I know/knew in the past. This is an expression of those phrases and of no particular case.
So they're like... secrets? things that I said to myself and kept secret.
and you know, secrets can come true.

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I feel kind of iffy about posting this on my DA page. It seems a little to... real?

It was more to release some of the words bouncing around in my head than ACTUAL emotion. Like phrases I could hear myself saying to people but never had the guts?
Yeah, those.
Those unspoken hateful things.
I hate those. But hey, It's better to let them out in a fictional way then to bash people. :D

I usually say what I want to say, or what I feel, or what I know needs to be said out of respect for my feelings and the feelings of those around me.
But sometimes there are people I can't risk breaking.

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:iconinvinsibleberryyy:
I loved this from the first line. Yeah, sometimes I can't tell people things straight in their face even though I should, even though they deserve it. (I hope that's what you mean though.)

"It's your turn to face loneliness, fear, and all those things you made me feel.
Like, for example, unlovable."

I just feel that 'unlovable' would sound better if it was 'unloved'? Just a suggestion. You're awesome.

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- Thus saith the Person.

Invisible People are to be killed on sight!
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No worries, that's what I meant :D


I used "unlovable" instead of "unloved" because there is no past tense of the word love. Because if you ever stop loving them, you didn't love them in the first place.

And unlovable refers to the inability to be loved now and in the future and in the past.

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"...I'll be happy tomorrow...."

Pessimist & Procrastinator

All Moonbeam.
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:iconinvinsibleberryyy:
Oh, but "unloved" doesn't really mean the past tense of love, it just means that whatever in question isn't loved. It's your poem though.

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- Thus saith the Person.

Invisible People are to be killed on sight!
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I fell in love with this immediately. It's very real...like you said...and I think it's something people can relate to. It seems like it was very therapeutic for you to write, as well, which is good.

The style of this is so different from your usual style, but I'd be interested to see you write more in this style, because you're so freakishly amazing with it.

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Proud member of =DailyLitDeviations,~ShortStackStories, and #Live-Love-Write
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heedle hee. I'll attempt more XD I was pretty much hating being alive when I wrote that though.

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"...I'll be happy tomorrow...."

Pessimist & Procrastinator

All Moonbeam.
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cherrichan13 made my avatar :D

[link] <----- click if you wish to have you brain consumed by me, the undead zombie.
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D: Well, that's not that fun. I hope you stopped hating life afterwords.

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Proud member of =DailyLitDeviations,~ShortStackStories, and #Live-Love-Write

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