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I loved you.
I love you.
I thought you did too.
But if you loved me, that wouldn't be you
Telling me
I was nothing
And I would always be
Zero.

The sum of your words
Amounts me to that,
With a heart in your hand,
Dropping the ax
You remember holding this heart once before
With your soul?
I remember. I watched it unfold
Everything black and white
So tainted red
In your sight
You don't understand
Why I live like I do
You still demand
to know the truth
but the answer in the endless night
Is that you were right
And that life
Isn't mine.
I Nothing.

You told me once you'd be my friend
But zero has no start and no end
Everything to sum up to,
But you refuse
To see how hard I could fall.
I am zero to you anymore.
Lying on the floor
Wondering why the dust hasn't filled my lungs
and choked me fairly.
:iconmoonbeam-lives-on:

Author's Comments

Words amounted me to zero, as they once made me so much higher.
They took everything away
And made me nothing. I am bad for the same reason I am good.
I can be nothing wrong, nor anything right
Because I have no choice but to be
Z.E.R.O

Rate this poem on a scale from one to ten. and If you say zero i'll assume it was a pun. MEANIE xD

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:iconwarzoneangel:
There was so much emotion wrapped around each word, and near the end the reader was fairly choked with the bitterness behind it, yet in a good way.

I'll give it a 9.3, but simply because nothing is perfect. ;)
:iconmoonbeam-lives-on:
Thank you :D

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"...I'll be happy tomorrow...."

Pessimist & Procrastinator

All Moonbeam.
*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*
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:iconxxemptyangelxx:
Well, I finally decide to stop being lazy and read some of your old ones.
Anyway, this one is definitely one of your best.
It's very emotional, and although that can go overboard sometimes, it works.
Like the first comment says, it's easily a 9 at least.
Maybe higher than a 9.3.
It could probably go up two or three more to 9.5 or 9.6.
That's what I think. *shrugs*
:iconmoonbeam-lives-on:
I only write well on two things:
Pressure
and
Emotion

--
"...I'll be happy tomorrow...."

Pessimist & Procrastinator

All Moonbeam.
*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*
cherrichan13 made my avatar :D

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:iconxxemptyangelxx:
You sound like me.
I can only write well whenever I have something on my mind.
Any other time, it's mostly crap.

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