I loved you.
I love you.
I thought you did too.
But if you loved me, that wouldn't be you
Telling me
I was nothing
And I would always be
Zero.
The sum of your words
Amounts me to that,
With a heart in your hand,
Dropping the ax
You remember holding this heart once before
With your soul?
I remember. I watched it unfold
Everything black and white
So tainted red
In your sight
You don't understand
Why I live like I do
You still demand
to know the truth
but the answer in the endless night
Is that you were right
And that life
Isn't mine.
I Nothing.
You told me once you'd be my friend
But zero has no start and no end
Everything to sum up to,
But you refuse
To see how hard I could fall.
I am zero to you anymore.
Lying on the floor
Wondering why the dust hasn't filled my lungs
and choked me fairly.















Comments
I'll give it a 9.3, but simply because nothing is perfect.
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"...I'll be happy tomorrow...."
Pessimist & Procrastinator
All Moonbeam.
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Anyway, this one is definitely one of your best.
It's very emotional, and although that can go overboard sometimes, it works.
Like the first comment says, it's easily a 9 at least.
Maybe higher than a 9.3.
It could probably go up two or three more to 9.5 or 9.6.
That's what I think. *shrugs*
Pressure
and
Emotion
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"...I'll be happy tomorrow...."
Pessimist & Procrastinator
All Moonbeam.
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I can only write well whenever I have something on my mind.
Any other time, it's mostly crap.
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